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更新时间:2011-10-12    来源/发布:www.en369.cn    作者/编辑:英语作文网

I have a sister she had a long oval face, big eyes, small mouth, the nose is a little fall, she had a short hair cut looks very spirit. She''s learning these days, and almost every year San Haosheng assessment. She told me her mother Lao Shina than, I felt very bad.

 

although her good grades, but she also has a drawback is that playing computer games. One time Aunt to work overtime on Sunday, as she went out, Zhuangshui sister got up right away, do not wash face, brush teeth and ran Daoshufangli not play computer games, even the grandmother told her to dinner, I told her to accompany I play, she pretended not to hear Liyebuli us. Aunt wait until her curse roundly meal home, she reluctantly returned to his room to do work.

 

I want my sister said, "Though you good grades, but you have to take the bad habit of playing computer games was altered, so that I will be more admired you.


Ningbo Aiju
401 first-year art school: Yan Yu

 

Comments: The article is well written, very educational, and read out the Yan Yu Although academic achievement is not very prominent, but it is a sensible boy. I believe you can have a good study habits, doing a outstanding students.

 

article structure, through a sister''s habit of writing events. First, concise language can describe the appearance of her sister, Yan Yu for the first year is a very difficult thing, but Yan Yu is described is in place, you can see a child usually very good observation. The second paragraph, by a number of events to reflect the character and habits sister, the teacher can see you through the second paragraph is a very articulate child, the narrative is also very complete in place, the basic narrative of events written by the sister habits. Third paragraph, is the highlight of your section, is that you get through this thing and the profound revelation is the sublimation of the article topic.

 

Total Comments: very strong language skills Yan Yu, Yan Yu also be able to see things through the nature of the phenomenon, which for the first grade children is commendable, I hope you can write a better essay.

 

Comments Teacher: Sok Yu-plus teachers


 

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